January 12, 2010

Journal #20 Pro/Con Response to Fireworks on Oahu

Complaints or Compliments?

Hawaii is a beautiful, peaceful place to live. Once new years and 4th of July comes fireworks pop out and its big celebration  no one can ignore. But some people take advantage of that by taking them apart and creating bombs that are so loud that people's car alarm go off. Fireworks are a brilliant way to celebrate occasions like that but they go overboard. There is so much smoke around that it's hard for us to breathe. People abuse the power of having legal and imported fireworks.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Thea,
    You seem to take a stand on fireworks, but you need to do it more strongly to provide evidence of your understanding of pro-con argument.
    The title also does not seem to reflect the techniques that we went over in class.
    assessment score: 2

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